This story is about a student named Joe. He is a foreword of high school basketball team. One day he loses a game for only one point. He was so sad and exhausted. He wants to take a nap to release his muscle, but he has an important test tomorrow. The test he has to pass in order to pass on his mid-tern report card. The surrounding was noise. He decides to take a break. Unfortunately when he woke up, it was already seven o’clock in the morning. How a big trouble he met. He feels the question of test was hard because he wasn’t well prepared. After the test, he was tension and wants to know the score hurry. Tomorrow when teacher pass back the paper to Joe. Joe was sad because he would pass the test if he got more 1 point. He argues with teacher. But finally he figure out what teacher wants to Joe know.
When people lose one point on the game he maybe not to care a lot. But fail on very important thing with one point, people will very care and ask anyone and use anything to get successes. In fact, lose is just lose. Why we can’t just hard work a little to pass it? That is this story wants to tell us.
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Hi Mark
Your article looks good, but you have some wrong in word spelling. Like this one, the word foreward should alter to forward. And you have some errors in grammar, the sentence “The surrounding was noise” , the word noise should alter to noisy. And there is a tense problem in the article. Like this one, One day he loses a game for only one point. You should change a verb to past tense. That your article will better.
Hay Mark. You've did good job in your article.In my submission, "The test he has to pass in order to pass on his mid-tern report card" I would like that way "He has to pass the test in order to pass on his mid-term report card".I will use "that" to combine " The surrounding was noise" and " He decides to take a break"." He feels the question of test was hard because he wasn’t (well prepared)" I thought is prepared well. I thought we still have many to make progress.
Jangchong Chung
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